Is Whump The New Term For Angst Or What ?? Im Starting To See Writers Use Whump A Lot Nowadays, Are They

Nasira bay - a mood board

– Song of lost secrets

"Those people are out to get us. They always have, and always will. He's human, he can't love you."

# rotting with ambivalence

i don't write poetry often, so this is likely not written well; and i have an unusual speech pattern, so this may not flow well aside from in my own reading; enjoy

i look at you and all i know is fading

my sense of couth lost, as im found desperately trying to reach it

all im bound to find is despair.

but you know that right?

youll tear me down to shame, night by night;

"my heart is not for the taking"

though this bruise feels all too loving

and so do my words.

another crack is left on my lips

i beg for you to think about me just once

to think about me in the sense of family.

we both know youll never get there

instead ill look for whats left of you;

i see you in the swans, their beauty suddenly ruined

i sit and watch as they deceive their admirers;

ill never blame them.

agreeing with this entire list, specifically number 2 and 8.

What I Love In Writing

Lately, I've seen so many negative posts (including my own) circulating about things not to do in writing, "advice" about which words to avoid, which tropes are most annoying, etc., etc. No wonder writing is often seen as a discouraging avenue to explore. In response, I've decided to make a post about things I personally LOVE to see in other people's writing, things that make me want to read more and more.

Attention to physical details that are less commonly described in stories. Three of my personal favourites are descriptions of hands, necks, and shoulders, which are just as expressive as eyes and other facial features.

When writers stretch a word's known meaning in a way that feels new and off-kilter. It always surprises me and draws me in. I particularly like when a noun is made into an interesting new verb. For example, "His eyes lanterned the dim room." Even though it might not make immediate sense, it can evoke a variety of new readings and emotions based on the context. If the scene calls for it, invent your own vocabulary. Language is yours.

I personally love contrasts between emotional states and settings, like when a character is facing turmoil on a beautifully sunny day, or, alternatively, two characters expressing their love for each other in a place that's falling apart.

How wonderful is it when someone can pull off the present tense elegantly? That sense of immediacy is refreshing.

Lengthy sentences that cascade rhythmically and emotionally to the point that you reach the end of the sentence and think, "Oh my gosh, that was only one amazing sentence!"

I love when characters are raw and real and messy and complicated, when they feel like people I could meet in my everyday life. I love when good characters do bad things and bad characters do good things.

Metaphors and similes, especially ones I've never read before.

I like when ugly or unexpected things are described beautifully. There is a difference between romanticizing something ugly and acknowledging an ugly thing's attributes thoughtfully enough to illustrate it with the same care and passion as a universally accepted lovely thing.

Personally, and I've changed my mind on this one recently, but I think it's sweet when I can pick up on favourite words or phrases the author likes to return to now and again. I understand it can be repetitive at points, but it's also like discovering a secret, cherished thing I can share with the writer. It adds to the voice. (Side advice: give yourself the liberty to change your opinions and try again with writing techniques you previously disliked).

Emotion, emotion, emotion. I'm an emotional person, and I like emotional writing that always walks that line between "balanced" and "too much." Not necessarily in that everything feels exaggerated or out of proportion with the plot, but that I can sense the characters' emotional states at all times, and sometimes even the grammar or language can reflect that - shorter phrases for an abrupt feeling, elongated ones for drawn-out, languid moments. The world is gorgeous, and our feelings are gorgeous. Writing that can capture that sensitivity has an everlasting effect on me. Like I'm at a party and the lights are too bright, the music is too loud, there are too many people, but it's all a reminder that I'm a human being. We're alive.

There are many, many more aspects of writing I love, too many for me to name but these are just some of the first that came to my mind. Amid all the cautionary writing tips you read out there, I encourage you also to establish for yourself the good things you should do. The risk of perpetual don'ts is a perpetual blank page.

Do what you love, and love what you do, but above all else, do.

My favourite pieces of dialogue from Sols so far,

except I don't tell you who said it.

"Then look at me like you used to! If you love me so much you'd look at me like you did when Mom was around!" "Oh my god. It's a boy?! I knew you were weird for [redacted] but you never said it was a fucking boy."

"He's dead obviously, but i see 'em. I see bits and pieces of his soul scattered about." "He didn't come back 'ere?" "No... no I haven't seen him since [redacted]." "No, no no. It's not right. We must keep tradition! We have to. I have to make sure of it." "I know what your people think of me, but I wont sit here and play pretend.”

- Intro to me/my account .*

General:

pronouns; he/him

age range; minor.

current read; crooked kingdom - Leigh Bardugo

interests; bones, typewriters, zombies, tim burton movies, 80s goth, physical media, journaling

fandoms; creepypasta, young royals, 5sos

inspirations; hozier, luke hemmings, jeff buckley, peter murphy, & edgar allan poe

fun facts:

im autistic, thus i have a strange speech pattern, so my 'poems' may not make sense aside from in my own voice. It also means i really struggle with telling tone (ironic as a writer, i know.)

ive enjoyed writing since i learned how, and never really stopped.

idk how to write straight couples as ive never experienced it, so I do it very rarely.

i really like "The tell tale heart"; i think it solidified my want to pursue writing as a career.

i lovee jeff buckley

i own a remginton 2 typewriter, though it doesnt work rn..

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information on my writing (+masterlists) below the cut.

My writing:

wips; 2 atm, ideas for 1 other i'll focus on later on.

My main wip is shortened to "SOLS". It follows 2 boys, one human, one siren. Both of them are gay and want the other, though they arent supposed to be together for various reasons.

themes of death, friendship, love, and manipulation/abuse

will be TWs for mental/childhood abuse & mild homophobia

My side wip is shortened to "MTR". It tells the story of a lesbian princess desperate to escape being heir to the throne while simultaneously falling in love with her childhood best friend.

themes of classism, love, lgbtq, and religion

genres i write; fantasy & romance w darker themes is really it for now. id like to get into writing horror though.

tropes i use often; queer and poc casts, forbidden/disapproved love, dead or missing family member.., bittersweet endings, capturing

what i'll post; lots to do with my wips, oc stuff, headcanons for the fandoms im in, "how to write ____", mightt experiment in fanfic / oneshots, occasional goth stuff, general writing things

i do not write;

straight pairings (non oc)

smut

incest

retellings

Masterlists:

Song of lost secrets (wip)

this will be updated regularly/as needed.

Willow Marwah - a mood board

– More than royalty

"how lucky are we to meet twice now in the same spot?"

Just remembered how many things need to happen in my story in order for it to be a full novel. I am no longer having a good day

Song of lost secrets (wip intro)

They sat in silence for a while. This time though, the words seemed to flow more smoothly. Tilting his head, he begins, "Did you know I was afraid of the ocean before we met ?"

General:

Genres; romance, fantasy, YA

setting; a small pirate town in the early 1720s

themes of; death, lgbt relationships, forbidden love, manipulation, courage, late redemption

POV; 3; third person limited

status; planning, character development

target length; novel

tag; #wip: song of lost secrets

CW's; torture, mild homophobia, mental/childhood abuse, kidnapping (none mentioned in summary)

Masterlist

I'm incredibly bad at writing summaries, so bear with me.

Summary:

Sols follow two teen boys; a siren, Hesperus, and a human, Salem. Salem was raised to think sirens are dangerous liars, but after their initial encounter, curiosity leads him to secret meetings with Hesperus. Over time they grow to like one another, but they cant openly be together due to the human society's toxicity towards merfolk; putting Salem at risk if the word gets out. Salem also has to deal with the decision to pursue his mothers dreams or to stay in Khirgurum with his family, best friend, lover, and home. Their secret encounters strain Salem's relationships, thus testing his priorities as well as his honesty. Nasira, another siren, has dissaproved from the start; doing all she can to stop them from seeing one another.

Characters:

salem

hesperus

nasira

emene

Silvia

Evan

Rayen

This will be updated as I see fit, and character profiles will be linked once posted.

okay yes kaz doesn't care about anything blah blah blah but have you ever considered that he remembers absolutely everything and not only the stuff he can one day use against the people in his life. he remembers how jesper puts cinnamon into his coffee so it doesn't keep him awake all day so kaz keeps cinnamon sticks behind the bar at the crow club for him. he remembers how wylan tucks flowers into his messenger bag so he waits beside a flower patch when they meet to discuss demo plans. he remembers how nina hates how her only pair of boots dig into her heels so he leaves a new pair on her bed without a word. he remembers how matthias is soothed at the sound of bird chirping so he tells him to walk down by the east harbor for "no other reason" than to "pick up a shipment" and NOT because seagulls and ospreys cluster there. and yes. his wife. inej. he remembers how pious and devote she is so he carves symbols of the saints into the wood of her ship with his knife to remind her he adores her faith despite all that he's said before and he would remember even in death how her raven hair flows down her back and how her nimble fingers stroke around her whiskey glass because he loves her GODDAMNIT.

hey when you make posts, i just want you to know, thou/thee/thy/thine/ye are like he/you(object)/your/yours/you(subject) okay? "thou art wearing shoes," "i will wear shoes for thee," okay?

you say thine if the next word starts with a vowel and thy if the next word starts with a consonant and they both mean "your" so "thine own shoes," "thy shoes," okay?

and ye means you and refers to the subject of a sentence, "ye members of the brotherhood of shoes," okay? you need this information to create better knight yaoi. i'm personally more interested in nun yuri but we are a community