You make a good point. The way taking deep breaths is written heavily distorts how long it actually takes. What takes a second to write would actually take longer to perform. It even leaves room for an awkward silence.
If you need an example, try to remember the last time you went to the doctor's office and they made you take deep breaths while they listened to your heartbeat. Not too bad in the doc's office, but pretty weird when you're in the middle of a conversation.
a big pet peeve of mine with these books is whenever shannon says that someone stopped and took 'multiple deep breaths' before continuing like im SORRY if i was talking to someone and they just stooped and started breathing deeply id assume they were having a panic attack or getting ready to fight me id probably back up
So sorry to the Layton fandom, but Orpheus and Eurydice have my heart.
Propaganda under the cut!
Orphydice:
"y'all probably know the story of orpheus and eurydice. but they are SO tragedy. they are TEXTBOOK tragedy. they redefined the genre. on their literal wedding day as she's walking down the aisle eurydice gets bit by a snake and dies. orpheus loves her so much he goes down to the underworld to try and save her. hades allows him to take her back to the land of the living, as long as she walks behind him, and he cannot look back, otherwise her soul will be taken. he's mostly fine , but begins to doubt and at the very end of the tunnel, he looks back. they lock eyes for a moment before she disappears back into hell. orpheus is then so distraught that he wanders the earth singing mournful melodies and gets stoned to death by some nymphs who think his sad songs are bumming them out. DUUUUDE their story consumed my every waking thought as a child."
Janice and Melina:
No propaganda submitted :(
Just got my ass handed to me in Kaycee's Mod.
Thank you for the apology. I appreciate it. On review, I think what got lost in translation was how I was thinking about nuclear warfare would turn out. My primary source was what happened in the American Cold War, where neither the U.S. nor USSR were willing to deploy nuclear weapons at risk of decimating the human population. I made the assumption that elves in their sense of superiority would think humans are too stupid/impulsive to hold themselves back as such. Therefore, the Council would give them the tech with the assumption that humans would eradicate themselves. Does that make a little more sense? As you can tell, sometimes it makes more sense in my head and less so out loud...
Do you have a source for the scientist thing? Because from what I've read, one of the scientists was an Austrian Jew, so I want to figure this out.
Shannon did not think it through when she said elves gave humans technology to build atomic bombs. Why? Because the Nazis... YES THE GOD DAMN NAZIS were the first people to start developing it. meaning the elves gave the Nazi's the tools to start developing it willingly
Breaking and entering on the grounds of we think the child is being held against her will.
Ive said this on another post, but Elwin was also someone who backed her search for her bio parents. When she mentioned that she had a right to know to Forkle, Elwin said "she definitely does." I think it would help her feel better that Elwin WANTED her to know, wanted to be part of her life like a good father would. It would definitely be a step up from Oralie's reaction.
If Elwin is Sophie’s dad can I at least pray she doesn’t feel betrayed? I mean Elwin being her father wouldn’t be the worst thing in the world. He has been with her since day one and has been nothing but a listening ear. Yes, him being revealed as her father would make things sticky but I don’t think Sophie would be appalled by the idea. I know people have been saying that she would be angry, and she would have every right to be. But at the same time if it is revealed I don’t think it’ll be that bad… Oralie being Sophie’s biological mom was a lot. The counselors have been against Sophie since the beginning and have made decisions to harm her and her friends constantly. Of course she’s going to be mad because she found out her mother was on the counselor that had been harassing her. But it wasn’t just that it was how Oralie handled it when it was revealed. She kept treating Sophie like she was fragile and shouting “it was the only way for me to have a kid”… like come on Oralie.
If Elwin is revealed that he’s her biological father I know 100% he would take accountability. Something that Oralie could NOT do when it was revealed. He cares for Sophie deeply and would not want her to be hurt so he would take accountability. He would be honest and he wouldn’t lie about anything when it was out. Elwin has always been a man of his word and that’s what i appreciate about him. Not to mention, yes he treats Sophie as a child because she is, but he also treats her as a person with her own life. He wants her to make good decisions and fight for what she wants. He wouldn’t see him having Sophie as his only way to start a family. Elwin would love her as his child not because she’s the moonlark but because she is who she is. He’s constantly proud of her for handling everything even though he knows it’s unfair. He states it in his doctors notes in Unlocked. He has always been on Sophie’s side. When she was exiled and she ran to him for help he was on her side. He fought for her and had hope for her. I don’t think she would be appalled about the fact he would be her dad. I think she would be relieved that it’s not a crazy person.
Would it be disappointing for some readers? Yes. It sure would mess up the headcanon of wanting Elwin to adopt Keefe. (Cuz that would make them kinda siblings… but Keefe can just stay an orphan ngl. I’m joking. I’ll make a new headcanon later.) Anyway- long story short, I don’t think Elwin being Sophie’s dad would be as bad as people say it would be. Not to mention I honestly don’t believe that Sophie would hate Elwin. She might be a little betrayed but come on it’s Sophie guys.
Hot tip: if your Jedi character says “I have a bad feeling about this” something bad needs to happen.
When anakin says this in the arena in AOTC, like 200 Jedi get killed in the next ten minutes, and a war begins. If the situation looks bad, but is going to resolve itself just fine, your Jedi will have a good feeling about it. You the author, presumably know what is going to happen, and your Jedi’s vague premonitions should act accordingly
Giggling and kicking my feet when the writing goes right.
The current stats are
10% it goes right
20% it goes horribly
70% what is writing
But I'm celebrating the wins
Roman Catholic female who's a little too neurospicy for her own good.
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